Snippet Sunday – FLY WITH ME – 23/10/2016 #romance #love #SnippetSunday

 

 

FLY WITH ME

This story is still a WIP, so critique away. It’s set partly in Melbourne, Australia, and in New Zealand.

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“After his girlfriend I’m the next most important person in Dylan’s life,” she said trying hard to match his humour. “And there’s never been a mention of a person named Mat. I’m pretty certain of that.”
“Damn the little bugger. Here I thought we were best buddies.” He paused for a moment then said, “Tell me, Tiffany, why were you so upset?”
“You tell me first how Dylan knows someone from New Zealand?”
He laughed again and it was one of those laughs that were contagious, but also one that told everyone this person loved to laugh. “You picked up on that, aye?”
“Educated guess.”
There was silence before he explained. “Dylan and I went to school together in Sydney and have stayed in contact since.”
She remembered that Dylan had grown up in Sydney, but had moved to Melbourne in his early teens because of his father’s job.
Mat’s voice brought her back from her thoughts and before she was able to reply, he said, “Darling, I love talking to you, but I’ve got to be somewhere in an hour. Can you promise me you’ll be okay?”

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13 thoughts on “Snippet Sunday – FLY WITH ME – 23/10/2016 #romance #love #SnippetSunday”

  1. Darling? He called her darling? Oh this guy is definitely sounding like a keeper! Very sincere and kind, and caring. I really like him. Still curious on the spelling of his name though.

    1. Hahaha re the name … check the tags you might find out. Glad you like him. He’s supposed to be all of the words you’re using 🙂

  2. Good chemistry coming through, Iris. 🙂 Mat seems like a great character!

    One crit: “He laughed again and it was one of those laughs that were contagious…” Should “were” be was? Doesn’t it agree with “one” and not with “laughs”. Maybe it’s where you live–British English or something. 🙂

    1. Thanks, teresa. Glad you liked it.
      And thanks for the critique … Always much appreciated. I’ve changed it a couple of times already, because English is my second language, reading it, I’d say was, my spelling program says were …. 🙂

  3. Is “darling” a general thing folks from New Zealand call strangers? Otherwise it seems to intimate for someone he just met (it would be in the US). Good snippet, Iris.

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