Welcome back!
My apologies for the silence over the last few weeks, but life threw me a curve ball of the biggest proportions. We’re dealing with it as best as we can and are looking positively towards the future. I do hope I’ll be able to post every week as I undergo treatment for cancer, but apologise in advance if I won’t be able to read or comment on your wonderful stories. I’ve missed them so much over the last few weeks and can’t wait to stop by again.
Anyway …..
FLY WITH ME
This is Tiffany’s story, who receives a call from the police one morning forcing her to deal with a chapter from her past, which she is unhappy to revisit. When she calls her friend Dylan, it’s Mat from New Zealand she ends up talking to.
This is still a WIP, so critique away. It’s set
partly in Melbourne, Australia, and in New Zealand.
Thanks … and enjoy 🙂
“Thanks Mat. Yes I’ll be fine.” It wasn’t a big lie, because at that moment she was feeling better.
She hung up and noticed a smile on her face. And instead of a churning stomach, butterflies had made themselves comfortable. She thought of how easy the conversation had flowed and how attentive he’d been. And his voice. She liked his voice. It’d been deep and calm, smooth and articulate. She closed her eyes and remembered his accent. It hadn’t been strong, but still obvious to her.
And then there’d been his laugh. God, his laugh. It had turned her inside out.
With a big exhale, she covered her face with her hands, surprised at herself that at a day she had to face the police, she was drooling over a man she’d never met, but only talked to.
For a few minutes, if at all.
The police. A ripple of worry went through her and she stood in search for her phone to give Dylan another call. This time on his mobile.
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I get the impression that events have brought her emotions close to the surface, which may have increased her vulnerability to his voice.
And speaking of emotions rising up to the surface, I’m so sorry to hear about your ill health, Iris. I empathize down deep in my bones, having recently had a deathly illness that will take a long time to recover from, and which will require surgery. I knew was mortal, but … well, a close call pounds the frailty of life –all life — through my thick skull. I’ll be thinking of you.
Thank you so much, Ed. Yes, news like that make your re-valuate your life and prioritise what is really important in life. All the very best with your surgery, I’ll be thinking of you, too!
And I’m glad you liked the snippet 🙂
Wow, I absolutely adore this line, “And then there’d been his laugh. God, his laugh. It had turned her inside out.” That is just something we can so identify with. Great snippet.
Sending you best wishes and prayers as you go through your treatment and return to health.
Awww, Chelle, you’ve made my day! 🙂 Glad you liked the snippet. … and Thanks !
Best wishes for successful therapy!
It’s lovely that she falls in love with his voice.
Thanks, and thanks 🙂 Yes, a “voice” can make a big difference I’d say.
Great description of her emotional response to talking to him. I can’t wait to see them meet for the first time. And {hugs}.
Thanks PT on both accounts …. I think I should get them “together” before xmas 🙂
Lovely to see you back, enjoyed the snippet and sending best wishes and good thoughts for getting through the cancer treatments. I was so sorry to hear that news today – many HUGS!
*enjoying the hug* – THANKS !
Thanks Veronica … glad you enjoyed the snippet 🙂
What a lovely snippet, her smiling as she realizes how smooth the conversation flowed, how it made her feel. Love this.
I’m so sorry to hear of your illness, and sending many positive wishes your way that your treatment goes off just as smooth and effective as your writing.
Hi Janell – so glad you liked the snippet. And thanks re the treatment …. i’m sure it will 🙂