Snippet Sunday – FLY WITH ME – 28/08/2016 #romance #love #SnippetSunday


This story is still a WIP, so critique away. It’s set partly in Melbourne, Australia, and in New Zealand.

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“Who?” Tiffany asked hardly above a whisper. Her whole body shook, and she knew she had to sit down soon or she’d faint.
“Thomas Terrill.” Jones repeated. “He was up on charges last year for the possession of drugs. The file states that you were involved—”
“There’s no way, I come with you.” She nearly screamed, panic rising within her. “You can’t make me—”
“Miss Brooks. We’re not here to take you with us, but to ask you a few questions,” Sergeant Harris explained. “Is there anybody with you at home?”
Tiffany’s forehead creased into a frown as she shook her head. Anxiety spread through the pit of her stomach, and she had to resist the urge to step back to shut the door.


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26 thoughts on “Snippet Sunday – FLY WITH ME – 28/08/2016 #romance #love #SnippetSunday”

  1. I like the way you describe her panic. Great show of emotion. Something seems to be missing between Jones’ comment “The file states you were involved–” and her response. If she wasn’t involved with Terril, she should deny it. If she was, she would probably say something like “Oh, my God.” Or “D-Drugs?” Good luck!

    1. Thanks, Diane. I will re-work the paragraph with the above suggestion in mind. Really appreciate it.

  2. You can feel her fear. I love how he’s trying to calm and reassure her that she’s not in trouble.

    I think you might have missed a word here, though? I come with you.

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