For today’s snippet I moved a little forward to introduce Addison – the main female character. My apologies that the snippet is a bit longer today, but I wanted to have that last sentence included.
DEFYING RULES is set along the Australian Great Ocean Road and tells the story of Ethan Tomlin, single dad, and manager of a hotel chain.
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Only a little while later, Addison sat on the small veranda at the back of her house with her parents having their lunch, everyone enjoying the view.
“I can see your mother coming for a visit more often than you might like.”
Addison let out a little laugh.
“Oh, Harry. Don’t be like that. I love the sea and you know that. But I know not to overdo it with my visits,” her mother replied.
“That’s okay, Mum. You’re more than welcome here. I suppose it’ll be nice to have you come around once in a while.”
“Have you met anybody, yet, darling?”
She nodded. “Yes. Can’t you remember I told you of the Christmas concert a few weeks back? The teachers were lovely and very welcoming. I was also introduced to my class.”
“Oh, how wonderful,” her mother cooed.
“The children seem very well behaved and very nice. I even had the chance to talk to some of the parents. A few of them even offered to help me move.” She smiled as she remembered the various offers. It was a bit like in one of those perfect movies of the perfect town — she always tried to find a catch to these generous offers, but people in Fermosa Bay seemed genuinely nice.
Leaning back as she took a bite of her sandwich, she remembered one of the parents in particular.
A boy’s father.
She wasn’t able to recall where the mother had been, but yes, she remembered the dad vividly. Of course, she remembered him. He reminded her of her favourite actor with his tousled short dark hair, the intense blue eyes, and a toned physique that she’d been able to see his muscles moving under his shirt. Or his long legs, which moved so effortlessly with leisurely grace.
Good Lord those legs.
But she wasn’t able to remember his name.
And with a sigh of disappointment, she remembered he hadn’t offered any help.
“Are you all right?” her father asked.
Her gaze went over to the sea, and she watched the subtle movement of the water. Yes, she was all right, and she knew this was going to be a great year.
“Dad, I’m not sure how to explain this, but I think I just had one of those moments of contentment. I have a feeling Fermosa Bay will be good for me.”
Her mother placed a hand on her arm, smiling with understanding.
Yet, her dad went to destroy her moment of happiness, however unintentionally it might have been. “Heard from Ryan?”
It only took Addison to hear his name to feel nauseous. And sad. But above all, it made her anxious. The sudden swirl of emotions overwhelming her.
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I’m curious to know why Ryan conjures up such strong emotions. Interesting snippet.
Thank you, Karen. Glad you enjoyed it!
You are totally evil for leaving us there. What’s the story on Ryan? Come on, spill!
Hahaha … sorry … LOL … we’ll find out soon.
She finds the ocean soothing, it seems. Reminders about Ryan less so.
Exactly 🙂 Thanks for stopping by, Ed.
Oh it was all going along so beautifully until the father dropped that name into the conversation! Loved the snippet!
So glad you liked it, Veronica. Thank you!
I don’t think I’m going to like Ryan. Great snippet. 🙂
Not the nicest person, no. Thanks for stopping by, Jennifer.