FLY WITH ME
This is Tiffany’s story, who receives a call from the police one morning forcing her to deal with a chapter from her past, which she is unhappy to revisit. When she calls her friend Dylan, it’s Mat from New Zealand she ends up talking to.
This is still a WIP, so critique away. It’s set partly in Melbourne, Australia, and in New Zealand.
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Mat took a sip of the coffee and was impressed by the flavour considering it cost him only a few bucks.
“Mate, you’re pissing me off here. Will you focus on this conversation?”
“When did you get so touchy?”
There was a sharp intake of breath and an exhale on the other end of the line. “Tiff had a rough twelve months and a shitty morning. I’m simply running a blank putting two and two together trying to fit you into all this.”
Mat froze mid-stride. Damn! He’d assumed something was wrong, but now he was curious about the history of it all. “What happened?”
“What the hell did you talk to her about, Matiu?” His friend’s voice was now loud and his tone impatient.
He leaned against the car with one hand in his pocket and watched the heavy traffic. Recalling his conversation with Tiffany earlier that day. “Well,” he began. “I answered your phone, so she hung up, but rang again. I told her you’re not home, and she asked me to leave a message and hung up. I returned the call and we had a bit of a chit chat.”
There was a pause before Dylan finally asked, “And which part made you think she was desperate to talk to me?”
“She kept calling. And my gut feeling. Instinct. Call it what you want.”
“That makes you worry about her?”
He thought about it for a moment. “And there was a panic in her voice. Gut feeling, mate, that’s all. Just glad you were able to help her. You’ll have to tell me more about your girl tonight. I’ve got to go,” Mat finally said.
“She’s not my girl,” Dylan replied through gritted teeth. “And good luck with your meeting.”
Mat disconnected the call, placed the cup of coffee on the top of the car, and then tried to re-program the direction to his meeting place in his phone. How he missed Queenstown at that moment. With probably only a tenth of Melbourne’s population, navigation was easy, only hampered sometimes by tourists who drove on the wrong side of the road or who were simply lost.
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10 thoughts on “Snippet Sunday – FLY WITH ME – 08/01/2017 #romance #love #SnippetSunday”
Now you’ve got me, as well as Mat, wondering what the problem was.
Putting on my critiquing hat: the exchange around “Silence” confused me a bit. I wasn’t sure who was speaking.
Thanks for that, Ed. Good point which I will have a look at. Much appreciated!
Another nice slice of life moment in the story. Still many questions to be answered of course!
Thank you, Veronica. Really appreciate you stopping by 🙂
Nice snippet. Makes me curious as to what was wrong with the woman. 🙂
I would definitely be one of those driving on the wrong side of the road. LOL!!! 🙂
LoL … even after 20 yrs i sometimes get the blinker wrong 🙂 Thanks for stopping by, Jennifer. Much appreciated.
Curious… I wonder why Mat is trying to avoid talking about her so much. And is Matiu his real name, and the reason for only one T?
Along the lines with Ed though, I was getting a bit confused on who was speaking where.
Yes, Matiu is his real name and thus only the on “T” 🙂 And thanks re the “who’s speaking”. Much valued comment. Really appreciate it.
I agree with Ed and Daelyn — I was frequently confused as to who was talking. I do want to know the whole backstory on this and why she was so anxious to talk to Dylan.
Yup, definitely have to change the conversation … LOL … thanks for stopping by, PT. Really appreciate it.