FLY WITH ME
This is Tiffany’s story, who receives a call from the police one morning forcing her to deal with a chapter from her past, which she is unhappy to revisit. When she calls her friend Dylan, it’s Mat from New Zealand she ends up talking to.
This is still a WIP, so critique away. It’s set partly in Melbourne, Australia, and in New Zealand.
Thanks … and enjoy 🙂
He thought of his friend’s comment about Tiffany’s rough year. Worry shot through him, and he wished he’d copied her number to his phone.
The sound of her voice was still playing in his head. A tone that stoked angst and concern.
Exhaling a long breath, Mat focussed back to the problem at hand and listened to the GPS directions — as well as following them. Thankfully, within only half an hour he found himself in an office opposite Karen Young, the representative of an Australian travelling agency.
A few months earlier, Mat had lost the coin toss between him and his partner Adam, and it was him now who was in Melbourne trying to negotiate a deal with Karen.
Mat and Adam had started their helicopter business five years ago in Fox Glacier, New Zealand. They’d liked the idea of doing what they loved every day and meeting people from all over the world at the same time. Now they flew hundreds of tourists to the summit of the glacier or hunters and hikers to inaccessible huts on the top of the mountains.
Today he was here to negotiate a deal to be part of a travel package for tourists, which included another venture in Queenstown, his hometown. He stepped into her small office, instantly overcome by some mild claustrophobia when he saw a small window with no view, but showing the walls of the building next door. Inhaling a breath, he forced himself to take in the rest of the office which was nicely decorated, with framed photos from all over the world.
Including his beloved Queenstown.
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I’m glad someone else gets claustrophobic like that. Great snippet. 🙂
LOL …. I often do when come into rooms like that …. thanks for stopping by, Jennifer. Much appreciated.
Good connection with his emotions, Iris. 🙂
Thank you, Siobhan 🙂
I love that he lost the coin toss. Sounds like neither one wants to deal with her.
Or …. neither wanted to be involved into the business side of things 😉 Thanks for stopping by, PT. Much appreciated 🙂
It sounds like a fun job!
Earn money doing what you love …. got to be the best job of all 🙂 Thanks for stopping by, Aurora.
A tiny bit heavy on the telling of backstory there….can you work what the reader needs to know into the conversation with Nancy? she’d ask about their firm’s background, the coin flip story could be a good thing (funny) or could insult her and then he has to fix his error…..etc. But the writing was smooth as always!
I have made a note, Veronica. Hugely appreciated! Thanks! 🙂
I liked the contrast between a view of a brick wall and aerial views of mountains and glaciers.
Thanks, Ed. Glad you liked it. And thanks for stopping by!
Funny how guys will settle things sometime by a coin toss. I wonder if all the framed pictures are actually snapshot photos Karen took or not.
That is actually a very good thought 🙂 Thanks Daelyn! And thanks for stopping by. Much appreciated.