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For today’s snippet I moved a little forward again into Addy’s POV. She’s arrived at home after a day at the school
DEFYING RULES is set along the Australian Great Ocean Road and tells the story of Ethan Tomlin, single dad, and manager of a hotel chain.
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Once she arrived home, she got out of her car and grabbed the mail from the letterbox before walking towards the door. The mobile buzzed in her bag and as she juggled the mail and the phone with both hands, she swiped the green answer key before the call would go to the answering service.
“Hello darling. How are you?”
A rush of warmth spread through Addy. She missed her mother and was looking forward to her visit over the following weekend. As much as she loved living in Fermosa Bay, being away from her parents was hard to get used to. Despite reminding herself that in her mid-twenty she shouldn’t fret so much about being away from her parents, she liked to think that it was because of their great relationship. After all, she was their only child. Her mother was unable to have more children after complications during her birth.
“I’m doing well. Looking forward to seeing you on Friday night.”
Her mother exhaled a small sigh. “Not happy?”
The question took her by surprise. Yes, she was happy in Fermosa. Of course, she didn’t expect to make half a dozen friends over night, but she missed a bit of company. Images of Ethan popped into her mind, and a little shiver ran down her spine. She’d seen him several times over the last few weeks when he picked up his son, but kept her distance, knowing how she ended up in Fermosa Bay in the first place. And yet, there was the awareness inside — or was it a hormone? — that nagged at her constantly hoping to have another conversation with him again.
In a bad attempt to focus on something else than Ethan, she walked back to the car, rearranged the mail in her hands, and took her bag from inside. “Of course, I’m happy. The children are gorgeous and the other teachers really nice.”
“Mu-um. That doesn’t happen overnight, but yes, I’ve been out with some girls and will start going to a book club next week.”
“Anyway, mum, I only just got home. Was there anything in particular you want to tell me?” She added with a soft laugh, “‘Cause I haven’t even made it into the house, yet.”
“I’m sorry darling. No, I just called for a chitchat. You get inside, and I’ll see you on Friday. Can’t wait. Love you, Addy.”
“Love you more, Mum.”
She disconnected the call and managed to slip her phone into the bag. Miraculously, she was able to retrieve her keys without dropping anything. Then she stopped short of inserting the key into the door lock when she noticed it broken with the front door standing a few centimetres open. Her instincts told her to run, but she stood motionless. Slowly straightening up with her keys in her hand, she stared at the gap seeing a few of her belongings spread all over the floor. Listening. Yet, she wasn’t sure what for, though, scared there might be someone moving around inside. Instantly, an involuntarily wave of goose bumps crawled up her spine at the prospect the intruder was still in the house. With a flicker of fear rushing through her, she gave the door a little push. Her heart began to beat erratically, pulsing in her throat. Panicking, she ran back to the car while she retrieved the phone from her bag again. It took her three attempts to do the simple task of pressing zero three times and hit the talk button. With her heart still pounding, Addy huddled behind the car as she gave the police all the information, initially vague on details until she was calmed by the voice on the other end.
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12 thoughts on “#SnippetSunday – DEFYING RULES – 25/06/2017 #romance #love #freebie”
What a scary situation. Glad she was smart enough to make the call outside the house.
Thank you, Karen 🙂
Wow, started out low key and normal which really upped the impact of her house having been broken into. Well done snippet! I’m on the edge of my chair now 🙂
GREAT! … LOL … glad you liked it, Veronica 🙂
Smart move to go outside and wait. Good snippet, Iris.
Thanks, Siobhan. Glad you liked it!
Nice snippet–she went from normal talking to her mom to something scary. I can relate to Addy–I’m an only child myself.
Thank you, Nancy. It’ll be interesting to find out, whether I got “her” right. I’m one of many 🙂
I like characters who act intelligently in situations like this, and Addy reacts like a smart woman. You’d think a small place like Fermosa wouldn’t have such problems, but think again, I guess.
Yes, the residents think along the same way … interesting to find out what happened 🙂 Thanks, Ed! Also re the “act intelligently” !
I could feel her chill of fear when she noticed the door. Well done.
Thanks, PT. Much appreciated!